This morning we had masterclasses about composition and storyboarding.
Other than that I have been working on my scripts, and nailing out the final story. I got critiques about my first draft for my script and switched the order of the story. At first the bull attacked him before he even got to get any milk. I was told that it didn't feel like enough was going on, and that it might be better that the bull charges after he's started milking the cow.
I completed a second draft of the script and received another critique. I was told that it was much better but there still wasn't enough. The end of it was very detailed, but the middle was still lacking. I was reminded about 3 part act storytelling. The beginning and end were important, but it was the middle that really needed to stand out, and my story just wasn't doing that. I am now in the process of adding new events to my script.
I have used Benny Hill chases as reference. (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D9I4nZx8UCs)
My ideas for 3 possible parts are:
-Cow runs away knocking over the bucket of milk
-The boy chases the cow around a tree, neither of them gaining any ground
-In a moment of confusing the cow starts chasing the man
-Scooby doo style running between doors (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AzHrWQgr2PE 0:26)
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